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Nutella_
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2021-11-21 10:03

Shameless author here. If you have any suggestions, let me know! Also, ask what you want! If you're going to insult me, please be gentle! Mhmm... hm.. hmmm...

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TheVeteranReader
TheVeteranReaderLv14

how many chapter are you going to post here? I am going to add this according to your answer.

pervy_sloth
pervy_slothLv4

can you try to make the mc not a simple or a pervert I'm tired of all these fanfics where the only thing on mc's mind is s*x

Nutella_
Nutella_Author

I couldn't tell you an exact number. I only had the first 2 chapters already written before publishing the novel. But I have some ideas for the Chuunin exams, so ... I think many?

TheVeteranReader:how many chapter are you going to post here? I am going to add this according to your answer.
Nutella_
Nutella_Author

It is highly unlikely that there will be adult content in this fanfic and I am still debating if there will be Romance.

pervy_sloth:can you try to make the mc not a simple or a pervert I'm tired of all these fanfics where the only thing on mc's mind is s*x
Theshadowveil7
Theshadowveil7Lv4

No harem plz🙏🏿🙏🏿🙏🏿

TheVeteranReader
TheVeteranReaderLv14

Man, harem is hard to write. You can't write it properly. You must advence plot according to a plan. İf you don't have any ideas, you can't ask us.

Nutella_:It is highly unlikely that there will be adult content in this fanfic and I am still debating if there will be Romance.
TheVeteranReader
TheVeteranReaderLv14

typo*can

TheVeteranReader:Man, harem is hard to write. You can't write it properly. You must advence plot according to a plan. İf you don't have any ideas, you can't ask us.
Wolf_bro
Wolf_broLv2

Is this evil MC

Nutella_
Nutella_Author

Maybe? For now, the MC will only seek to be strong.

Wolf_bro:Is this evil MC
Ghost_Playing
Ghost_PlayingLv14

Does this mean the mc can kill people or is he the righteous hero of justice that can’t even kill a mouse but dies cause of stupidity and betrayal and what not...? Btw I recommend not doing a harem unless you want a complicated story that isn’t wirth it but I saw that you don’t want to do it anyway and since you’re thinking about romance I’d say only making an option for it in the story like you have the possibility to make that girl the mcs girlfriend but it doesn’t mean she will be his girlfriend so you don’t completely block all paths for romance but just leave the option there for the later chapters. (I always hated romance when it came at the early chapters cause it just made me cringe too much and I think the early chapters are there to concentrate on the mc and bot someone else...)

Nutella_:Maybe? For now, the MC will only seek to be strong.
Ghost_Playing
Ghost_PlayingLv14

Not*

Ghost_Playing:Does this mean the mc can kill people or is he the righteous hero of justice that can’t even kill a mouse but dies cause of stupidity and betrayal and what not...? Btw I recommend not doing a harem unless you want a complicated story that isn’t wirth it but I saw that you don’t want to do it anyway and since you’re thinking about romance I’d say only making an option for it in the story like you have the possibility to make that girl the mcs girlfriend but it doesn’t mean she will be his girlfriend so you don’t completely block all paths for romance but just leave the option there for the later chapters. (I always hated romance when it came at the early chapters cause it just made me cringe too much and I think the early chapters are there to concentrate on the mc and bot someone else...)
Ghost_Playing
Ghost_PlayingLv14

Btw I hope you continue writing this book till the end👍 Wish you luck🍀!! 😁

Ghost_Playing
Ghost_PlayingLv14

Does the mc look like in the cover? Would be cool in my opinion. Blue eyes and dark purple hair is just noice.

Ghost_Playing
Ghost_PlayingLv14

Btw author will he have a bloodline later on?? Y'now that tasty OP Senju bloodline over there in the corner of your brain 🧠 just waiting to be unlocked of the prison it is in?

Nutella_
Nutella_Author

Yes, maybe he has one.

Ghost_Playing:Btw author will he have a bloodline later on?? Y'now that tasty OP Senju bloodline over there in the corner of your brain 🧠 just waiting to be unlocked of the prison it is in?
Ghost_Playing
Ghost_PlayingLv14

NOICE!! [img=recommend]

Nutella_:Yes, maybe he has one.
Voidarth
VoidarthLv14

Author No need for Harem but atleast let him have 2 girls

1412_8346
1412_8346Lv1

no 1 is enough,2 is a harem

Voidarth:Author No need for Harem but atleast let him have 2 girls
xlvlx
xlvlxLv4

If you have no plans on romance with any character then i recommend kaguya. You can shape her easily to how you like since she is the quiet type.

Nutella_:It is highly unlikely that there will be adult content in this fanfic and I am still debating if there will be Romance.
Immortal_Panda
Immortal_PandaLv14

Is there a romance in this?

Nutella_:I couldn't tell you an exact number. I only had the first 2 chapters already written before publishing the novel. But I have some ideas for the Chuunin exams, so ... I think many?
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