The book has a lot of potential and is fast-paced. I feel bad for Roran since he is only 11 and has to survive in such a terrifying world. I do feel that you mention Roran's name too many times so why don't you try replacing his name with a 'He'. For example instead of saying 'Roran was tired. Roran decided to go to sleep' say 'He waas tired. He decidedc to go to sleep'. You get the gist. All the best!
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