Review Detail of Nightly1 in This FF has a lot of issues so it being rewritten with a new plot
Review detail
One of the best iseas, having 2 best friends As narUto and sasuke. But after that, it just goes down hill. their “perks” were too overpowered. aLready at the age Of 7, they are strong enough to defeat Kage legels or at least are near kage levels. On top of that they get wishes. A good story is something that challenges the main characters. But In this sTory, there is no challenges. narUto has everything he could ask. same goes for sasuke. way to fix this is By removing the power ups. make susUke awaken hIs Sharingen because NaRuto Or his family was in danger. make kyubu like in original but with less hate compared to original because naruto would always talk with him. If ur goal is to have a story of 20 chapters, yea this could work. but i dont think thats ur goal because u choose naruto as ur world. For a long term story, Have real life challenges thrown at mcs. so they can be retable. otherwise , it just becOmes super boring after chapter 4, in my case and even then, i skipped some paraGraph because it diDnt make sense. background charavters are super weird too. they feel like nps and mcs feel like npcs with better ai.
This FF has a lot of issues so it being rewritten with a new plot
Games_of_Karma
Liked by 2 people
LIKEReplies3
sorry pal but I have to say that this isn't your piece of cake, I like having a overpowered mc and Many people want Overpowered mc. Having A mc struggle is not my most St favorite thing to do but if you want that kind of story, Then you will have to wait for some time because after this I am thinking of writing a Story where mc is Born in Naruto world no reincarnation and He faces struggles so if you don't like this one then you can just wait.
Sure, but whats the end goal here? At this rate, why not make them directly go to obitos hideout and destroy him or destroy oRochimaru. Its not that i dont like op mcs. i do but thats only if they are done right. a character can be OP but can have challenges mentally or socialy, or some way so that there can be CHARACTER GROWTH. thats my main point behind the review. i dont see any chance or probablity of character growth in your mcs. Human beings always evolve. so to make the story feel more alive/enjoyable, make them grow. otherwise youll be stuck in a very tight spoT as an author.
Games_of_Karma:sorry pal but I have to say that this isn't your piece of cake, I like having a overpowered mc and Many people want Overpowered mc. Having A mc struggle is not my most St favorite thing to do but if you want that kind of story, Then you will have to wait for some time because after this I am thinking of writing a Story where mc is Born in Naruto world no reincarnation and He faces struggles so if you don't like this one then you can just wait.image
Dude story has just started you don't even know What am I planning to do, So please just sit back and watch where the story goes after Chapter 30 if you still think that this isn't going anywhere then you can Complain as much as you want
Nightly1:Sure, but whats the end goal here? At this rate, why not make them directly go to obitos hideout and destroy him or destroy oRochimaru. Its not that i dont like op mcs. i do but thats only if they are done right. a character can be OP but can have challenges mentally or socialy, or some way so that there can be CHARACTER GROWTH. thats my main point behind the review. i dont see any chance or probablity of character growth in your mcs. Human beings always evolve. so to make the story feel more alive/enjoyable, make them grow. otherwise youll be stuck in a very tight spoT as an author.