Review Detail of CokeWhale in My Upgrades Are Invincible Old/Betrayed/Forgotten/Dead

Asking for money for this low quality a story is beyond ridiculous to me. Even ignoring the content for now, the spelling, grammar and styling is middle-school-homework level bad. It's bad even for a first draft. That the writer then has the balls to release it in that form is.. something else. The content is honestly pretty childish, but should be less of a focus than presentation, for now. Conveying a story is difficult, but continuing with this kind of lazy writing will never get you anywhere.