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Here's my personal rating meaning my opinion so don't start badmouthing just because our opinions aren't the same because I'm sure some people will say "You have bad taste" or something like that and hey tastes are personal so I might think something is nice and you might think differently, it doesn't mean I should disregard your tastes it just means we don't like the same thing. Anyway, onto the rating. 1-Writing Quality: The author already said their grammar is crap compared to Google translate. I personally feel my eyes dying but at least we where warned right? Anyway the writing could use a lot of work or the author could ask a friend or one of the readers to proofread or clean up the texts so it'd look better. Because of the lack of quality in the writing my score is: [2 Stars Here] 2-Story Development: The story does not have a great plot... if at all. Don't get me wrong, yes it follows the canon in a way. There is no concrete backstory but the author tried to compensate for it using an inventory item. But it still felt forced, the start was interesting but it all felt forced. Someone will probably say "No, it's not forced." but even him joining was forced, we can see it when MC got a choice but then it was accepted by default. What's the point in showing a choice if it's not really a choice? [2 Stars Here but my opinion is 1] 3-Character Design: HOW DOES MC LOOK?! We spend more than 3 chapters with no full description of anyone besides their hair colors and at one point MC's spikey hair. Personality wise the og crew has similar personalities compared to their anime counterparts but then the get original(which is positive but it needs to be consistent). [3 Stars Here but my opinion is 2 Stars. I gave 3 because the OGs are similar and since it's a fanfic] 4-Updating Stability: It seems like there is updating consistency from the release dates and that's good, it means it's an ongoing book and could improve. [4 Stars Here] 5-World Background: What world background? If you don't know One Piece you'll be lost here, they're at the see, book wow there's an island. No indepth description of the ship, current location or part of the trajectory of the ship. I mean, you don't need to constantly give full details but initially when in a new location in the story it helps pain a picture. [2 Stars Here, no comment] Overall: 2.6 The Story has a lot of potential and I love Nami as a love interest and hope this story improves but so far it's been a pain to read and enjoy (I've enjoyed some moments). Recommendation: 1-Take more time to get the world flow going, what I mean is investigate the world. For example the current arc and then see how you can change it to your tastes including the MC without making it forced. It's a pain to do but it's better to have something nice without loosing it's essence then just posting and being mad at the comments and reactions. 2-Find a friend or make a community so you can check volunteers to edit and proofread your work. Sometimes the chapter is great but the organization sucks so having a second pair of eyes can help and you don't lose anything since you have the final say. 3-Be mindful to criticism, there's a difference between criticism and plain negativity, some may demoralize you from writing so learning to take a hit can help you in the long run. 4-Happy New Year, it's important to take a step back and relax sometimes so it doesn't put too much pressure on you and it can also help avoid writer's block. Hope this helps.

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My wife is a Cat Burglar

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Personally I appreciate your comment for taking so long to read and writing this , hope I can improve it.