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2021-12-01 19:38

I like the idea behind it, but the quality of the writing is bad. I like the idea of the MC having Majin Buu's ability's, but the fact that there isn't a limit or a way for the MC to unlock them is really terrible. The MC could just straight up go to whitebeard, kaido, big mom, garp or any of the OP characters, turn them into candy then gain there strength. There is also a problem with the actually writing fluidity. The fluidity of the writing along with the grammar mistakes (which i looked passes as the authors first language isn't English) makes for the story to be un-enjoyable and difficult to understand what's happening in the plot. Some advise I have for the author is to either set some limitations on the MC's ability or through the journey make him do challenges that he would have to complete from the ROB to unlock more of his potential powers. I also recommend using a writing tool like read and write gold or Grammarly to help with the fluidity and grammar for the writing.

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