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Review Detail of Apns444 in One Last System

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Apns444
Apns444Lv121yrApns444

Started out strong, went downhill really fast. In just the free read (55 chapters) we get: 1. Broken system 2. Shy, slave girl who isn't really shy at all 3. Young master targeting said girl 4. MC asked to accept the girl as slave, says that he wont accept her as a slave but as a PARTNER (?) and decides he will protect her against everything, without any reason 5. The girl falls in love with the MC after 2 weeks of doing nothing but training, the MC then starts straight up SIMPing for the girl, she throws herself at him naked and he refuses because 'i dont want you to love me because i helped you' 6. MC makes a fortune selling KETCHUP recipe 7. MC is forced to hide his power due to some stupid reason 8. Sepration of MC and FL with reunion around chapter 300 (why even introduce romance if most of the time they are separate?) 9. OP sect elder, who can do whatever he wants and even patriarch of the sect lets him to do so, accepting MC and the FL as direct disciples right at the beggining Then the worldbuilding - it's pretty nonexistent, we get no descriptions of locations, barely any descriptions of where they live, whats around, nothing. Character design? It's bad. MC is a beta simp, FL is 2D at best, side characters aren't even worth mentioning (through the first 55 chapters you meet senior brother and medic who are there to only introduce FL to MC, the sect elder who takes them as disciples and is the man buying the ketchup recipe for 1500 gold coins, two bad elders scheeming with the young master and 3 lackeys - all of them just for a chapter to get faceslapped) Story development itself is slow and cliche. Stability of updates can and should be praised. Honestly? The idea was good, but the amount of cliches and 2D characters ruined it bad.

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One Last System

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Xurgethaqiewrthgds
XurgethaqiewrthgdsLv15Xurgethaqiewrthgds

Aha thats where your wrong. Terio is also there to make arthur go to the party and become a dumbass by poising himself. Cant forgot that part.

I_Am_YourDad
I_Am_YourDadLv4I_Am_YourDad

That's a good review if you ask me I'm Enlightened

CCP_ARE_RETARDED
CCP_ARE_RETARDEDLv2CCP_ARE_RETARDED

DONT READ !!!!! THIS STUPID !!!!!! RETARD NOVEL !!!!!! AUTHOR PLEASE KILL YOUR SELF

The_Dark_Hydrax
The_Dark_HydraxLv4The_Dark_Hydrax

You forgot he gets drugged and r*ped by female Jabba the Hutt