Review Detail of Indian_Rake in He has descended

Item: He has descended
Rating: 5

Review detail

Indian_RakeLv122yrIndian_Rake

Good book but keep paragraphs shorter and there's too much info dump........................................................................

He has descended

Kingoftimepass

Liked by 3 people

Replies2

KingoftimepassAuthorKingoftimepass

Hi, i have already started reducing the size of paragraphs, as for the information dump, i am just trying to paint a picture is all. I will try to shorten the description

2yr

Indian_RakeLv12Indian_Rake

Just a word of advice. Think about rewriting this novel with simple terminology and story. Saying this because views are too less for a novel with 40+ chapters.

Kingoftimepass:Hi, i have already started reducing the size of paragraphs, as for the information dump, i am just trying to paint a picture is all. I will try to shorten the description

2yr