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CkLance
CkLanceLv153yr
2022-02-15 02:27

Honestly I should have have just listened to the critic reviews. The story is overall well put together with pretty good grammar and story development. Things are fine until chapter 49, but it isn't NTR like people are saying. It simply comes down to the author changing their mind about Moka being in the MCs harem, but the way its done feels like a massive betrayal to the readers. The author set expectations for Moka to join the MCs harem, built them up very well, but got chapter 49 and basically did a 180. Basically the author tells the readers Lith can't see Moka that way because she was a 'daughter figure', but turns around and makes Moka fall in love with her 'brother figure' in a few sentences. I get it author, you changed your mind and thats fine... but tell us how it happened. It was basically 'his son's blood tastes good too (100+ years timeskip) Moka loves his son now' ggez

Highschool DxD: A New Satan

Alexander_the_grey
4.5
74 Chs

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random_Scribbler
random_ScribblerLv12

thanks for the heads-up

2yr
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CkLance
CkLanceLv15

Comment was shadow banned

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Kenrio
KenrioLv11

This a dxd fanfic but mc dont have a harem so of course this automaticaly become a trash dxd fanfic. worst of all author is one of these crazy people that dont like to change a pairing even in a fanfiction so grafyia the best girl of the series continue with the 2 worst character and siscon sirzech, so the level of this fic is even worse than a wish fulfilment one for me

3yr

ThatsClassified
ThatsClassifiedLv11

I'll be straight up honest bruh, everything was like 4-5 stars up till chapter 50, that's where everything started going downhill, bro got us attached to characters like da Vinci and Moka and just kinda gave them to other dudes, Mike to his son and Vinci to azazel MIGHT also have his other kids under his first son in thier peerage which he said he might to, if he does its just gonna go down even more, everything just had a downgrade, everything's forced and kinda bland now and characters(some)are doing some weird personality swap all the time

3yr
SalsitaHabanera2k
SalsitaHabanera2kLv12

The protagonist was NTR'd by his own son... can you believe it? Lol its game over bruh gg [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]

3yr
AshbornKRAVKE
AshbornKRAVKELv10

First of all, I LOVE THIS FANFIC! This take place at civil war meaning before canon dxd start so it's already going to be good. Romance is good so far, I do hope it's not big harem since I'm sick with it. We need more good story rather than good harem.

3yr
Hopps
HoppsLv14

Reveal spoiler

3yr
trudny1
trudny1Lv4

Step 1: Create a waifu in story Step 2: Set her up, show her interest in MC Step 3: Do a timeskip during which waifu does 180 and goes for the son of MC Step 4: ??? Step 5: Live on with disappointment of what you have read just now Okay, to be fair, in my opinion the idea of having potential waifu change her mind for a someone is not bad at all. The issue was how it was delivered. For quite a few chapters there was a build-up showing that waifu wants to be with MC and is trying to break his 'defenses'. And then instead of showing us how she develops feelings for someone else and that she only feels familial love to MC we got a FAT TIMESKIP that just causes 180 of emotional development up to now. On top of that said waifu stays as one of the pieces of the MC instead of joining her new love which only increases giant disappointment. I do not believe that MC got NTR-d but can definitely see why some people say that.

3yr
Young_fruit_Smiley
Young_fruit_SmileyLv14

Reveal spoiler

3yr
Hentai_Senchou
Hentai_SenchouLv6

Author has never heard of "show, don't tell." Literally every single chapter is the main character explaining what happened in his own head/as the narrator. Almost nothing actually happens in a different way. It reads less like a story and more like an info dump where the protagonist lets us know everything that happened.

3yr
BigStig97
BigStig97Lv13

Very good story so far!! Hope to see more!..................................!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.! m mmjbdbbsishdbdbakajsjslksksjsjsjsj

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