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2021-12-19 22:00

alright... this young man is full of indecision. The setting for this story is good, but you basically threw it out the window early on. James just seems like any other slightly experienced player if not a little less do to some questionable decisions. also i understand that his sister is sick and he needs to make 400k in a month, but he already has 300k in less than a day, so that canary has pretty much sung its song. His mentality also seems really weak for someone who reincarnated. On that note i think the story has potential it just needs some polishing and to stay on track with the focus points of the story.

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