1. A lot of describing and thats good... the reader can easily imagine the scenery and the mood that is shows 2. Peoples faces are mostly just descibed? How is someone dressed is also essential for better understanding and imagining 3. Dont skip scenes too fast...for the begginning is already happening a lot...getting to know the character+his life+his world+ other ppl+ story 4. I like that you made it kinda scary and bloody and that you escalated the excitement 5. The ending is def the best part just because of the clocking, also it is is attractive cuz you want to find out the reasoning behind his future actions 7. Overall, it is a nice novel... its like hella good written, I mean its fancy like its supposed to be, the story is interesting, def want to find out more of it (but just go slowly from now on with the story) 8. For a starter you are doing great so keep us entertained with the story!
Inzaghii
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