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Abysmal MC. You finish a game and what, want to leave the world because, post-game clarity? At the starting point of life yet already saying he doesn't want to be an ordinary person. Boi is 21 years old. Too much tictok influence making these young adults delusional. Bro is depressed becuase he grew up in an orphanage and has no "real" friends. If he played 1 mmorpg, im sure he would have many friends considering how long he can play this 1 game for. Thats just chapter 1. By the end of Chapter 4 he is like; I'm in the game world. I took over the body of a guy who just died by committing 'that'. But now I can have a new chance of life. Also gonna get emotional because we have that 'original body is emotional for family stuff' baggage. He complains about fake friends and relationships in chap 1 yet is ready to exploit relationships and secrets in the game world, his new chance. Literally he just wants everything handed to him. Now another crazy plot point without spoiling anything. MC will get a special item, crazy for a game world isekai. What is particularly remarkable is a few lines introducing it: "We researched it for a long time, but in the end, we realized that no matter what we did, we wouldn't get anything out of it. "..."Obviously, everyone was hesitant. Because this was an illegal place connected to the black market. So no one doubted that they had tried literally 'everything' they could try on that stone. " I was thinking, surely they did THAT. But then the MC does THAT. The novel is a joke. Its not a matter of cliches. Its the way they are presented. Truck-kun works for a reason. Blank screen works for a reason. Trying to write a good reason for leaving the world works if you can write a character/backstory. The force feeding of emotions is heinous. Like a game making the player kill a regular normal small puppy for no reason. Its just there and you have to kill because author wants to artificially create emotions or substance to inflate the novel's ideology. I'm still reading a bit more, seeing if things get better. I held off on writting stuff despite how atrocious the start was. easily 0/10 stuff. I had to write something after reading about Mc doing THAT. Just realized this was the entirety of volume 1. What a great start. Deleting my 2 min older post.

The Extra of The Lunerra

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Thanks for your long review and for telling the problems :)

Douke
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Good luck author you can do it

WindskyW:Thanks for your long review and for telling the problems :)