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2023-01-16 10:22

This story is a new look on vampires that I haven’t read before. It’s has potential to be great. You got this author!

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BishopsNemesis
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[[[[[[[ Attention! This content contains spoilers that may ruin your enjoyment of the material. Proceed with caution and read at your own risk while reading the Psychological Perspective section]]]]] --------------------- [Psychological Perspective] it seems that the MC, Ruqui, has experienced a significant amount of trauma in his life. He has lost his parents and has had to adapt to living with an adoptive family. He has also witnessed arguments and tension between his parents, which may have had a lasting impact on him. Additionally, he has grown up in a world where there is ongoing conflict between different species and has had to navigate danger and uncertainty. All of these events and experiences may have shaped the MC's psychology and influenced his thoughts, feelings, and behaviors. It would be interesting to see how the MC's psychological perspective is further developed and explored throughout the story. [Writing Quality] The writing in the novel is strong and engaging. The descriptions of the characters and setting are vivid and help to build a clear image in the reader's mind. The dialogue is well-written and adds depth to the characters. The plot is intriguing and keeps the reader interested in the story. However, there are a few areas that could be improved. One issue is the pacing of the story. At times, the narrative feels slow and could benefit from more action or plot development. Additionally, some of the transitions between chapters and scenes feel abrupt and could be smoother. There are also a few instances of awkward or repetitive phrasing that distract from the overall quality of the writing. For example, the phrase "to this day" is used multiple times in the first chapter and feels repetitive. Additionally, there are a few instances of word repetition within sentences or paragraphs that could be edited for better flow. [World Building] The worldbuilding in the novel is fairly well-developed. The author has created a distinct setting with distinct species and their relationships with one another. It is clear that there is a history between the vampires, humans, and werewolves, and that they have learned to coexist and live together in the land of Saunders. The concept of a "Great Beginning" in which these three species decided to end their hostility and live in harmony is also an interesting aspect of the worldbuilding. Additionally, the presence of a ruling monarchy and their role in maintaining the peace between the species adds an extra layer of complexity to the world. However, some of the details about the world and its politics feel a bit vague and could be further fleshed out in order to create a more immersive and cohesive world. [Story Development] The author has done a good job at introducing the main characters and their motivations early on, and has provided enough background information to help the reader understand the world and its rules. The plot has progressed at a good pace, with a mix of action and character development, and the story has remained engaging and interesting throughout. The various subplots and side characters have also been well integrated into the main narrative, and have added depth and complexity to the story. However, there are a few areas where the story development could be improved. One issue is that some of the transitions between scenes and chapters have been a bit abrupt, which can cause confusion for the reader and disrupt the flow of the story. Additionally, some of the dialogue and internal monologue has been somewhat stilted and unnatural, which can make it difficult for the reader to fully connect with the characters.

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