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SupremeOne
SupremeOneLv32yr
2021-12-17 18:01

After reading the last chapter of the novel, I was a little disappointed in some things. To explain, first of all, the main character acts like an idiot in the first 30 episodes and doesn't use his mind. The reason why I say idiot is that although the main character has been addicted to gambling since the age of 15, he does not show any tricks or cunning. The funny thing is, he remembers that after 30 episodes he didn't have the most basic thing to live on, and that's money. Then the first thing it does is ask the system for money and it's really frustrating. Anyway, I can say that he started to get a little smarter since the 30th episode. Although the main character's only problem is that he can solve things the easy way, he is someone who chooses the hard way. However, after 30 episodes, he starts to improve himself. At least he's showing some will. Also, there are not many details about the world the main character goes through. It is commonly referred to as world 2. However, it is not known whether there are any changes or differences. I think it would be better if some details about it were shared. Other than that, I think the writing quality is pretty good. The story goes very smoothly. Author, I hope you can make the main character a little more clever and cunning. The main character doesn't have any abilities or traits, but seems to be able to evolve.

I transmigrated into a harem world.

Jeffson
2.8
96 Chs

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Jeffson
JeffsonAuthor

Thanks for the constructive and detailed review, I like the fact that you mentioned the pros and cons of the novel. All I can say is that I'll try to improve myself as an author and my writing. Thanks for the review once again.

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Preston_Playz_8167
Preston_Playz_8167Lv4

I saw the title of one chapter 'watching them fuctk" and doesn't need to take me to read this novel.

Jeffson:Thanks for the constructive and detailed review, I like the fact that you mentioned the pros and cons of the novel. All I can say is that I'll try to improve myself as an author and my writing. Thanks for the review once again.
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