Review Detail of David_Drake in Unbound Familiar
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Honestly I had high hopes for this considering the past works. Sadly, the MC is one I despise. Not because he is a 'Beta' which he actually isn't one, but due to his decision making skills. A) He kills a noble after purposely provoking the guy. Then complains how the world is so unfair. Like seriously, my man, you went out of your way to attack the poor guy. B) He gets mind controlled. Honestly, this by itself is already something I despise, but the MC walked straight into this one. Pretty much, he is in prison, guilt trips his master, then goes off on a killing rampage. When he's leaving the country, he doesn't even try to sneak through, Instead he just walks straight through the boarder check and gets caught/enslaved. C) After he frees himself, he goes on a rampage and kills alot of innocents. Dragons die, the second Waifu gets burned at the stake, and he swears bloody vengeance on all. Due to the unjust treatment which has been set upon him. (Unjust = Low IQ. He brought all these conflicts upon himself.) D) Instead of the MC developing in a positive direction, plot armor reinforces this 'blind justice' or better yet a crusade. He doesn't learn anything of value since he succeeds in everything revolving around getting 'revenge'. He doesn't learn from prior mistakes and has yet to develop a positive change in his current self destructing nature. Overall, if this was a rising to the occasion type of story, this would've been rather good. Sadly, it is just a fic following some child who believes the world is out to get him. The guy throws tantrums and simps too hard by killing innocents for his 'justice'. An eye for an eye isn't even close. Its a genocide... Overall, most of his problems could've been avoided with at least a bit of thought put behind some of his less 'stellar' actions.
Unbound Familiar
Niggross
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Oh. Well, at least you don't burn with the fictional Beta MC personality, I would look at these "alphas" in similar circumstances. Of course, I would have acted differently, but I certainly would not have tried to immediately dominate Louise. It is simple and uncomplicated to point out that the nobles have personal warriors from commoners (remember Agnes), and a human is many times more useful than a mouse in any case. And after just demonstrating usefulness with Gandalf runes, it’s not so difficult to force yourself to consider a fork, a chair or my fists as a weapon. I remember how I broke watermelons with a blow of my fist, or knocked dust out of a concrete wall, broke bricks ... Oh, school. Although I use grips more than blows ... You can put an adversary on the wall, and then on the floor, repeat as much as necessary. Fewer marks on the body will remain on the opponent, and he will feel more helpless. But I understand how someone like an MC must feel. And I know how power changes a person. I do not need to sublimate my weakness by reading only about the powerful MC dominating from the very beginning over all living things, sometimes contrary to logic. It is more interesting for me to observe the personal development of the MC. What you described is also part of personal development. Didn't you have something like that? When you do stupid things on the wave of maximalism, you don’t think, you mess up. It's good that not everything goes as the MC planned, exactly? Overcome not only external obstacles, but also internal ones.
