I really like the concept and the pacing isn't bad. The main character is were the story fail. There are too many small things that he does that are illogical and annoying. The thing that really turned me away from this is the Daphne stuff. She instantly has a crush on him at age 7. He clearly sees this and decides this little girl is the perfect candidate to be his closest friend and he's going to instantly share some of his best kept secrets with her. And he has a marriage contract with this little girl. And he makes a second marriage contract with her backed by some really weak logic. And she's even more talented than the 'Strongest Harry Potter' in the multiverse for some reason. The MC seems to want to become an unkillable multiverse-traveling wizard. Cool. Leave the little girl best friend out of it.
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