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yeairead
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2022-12-01 02:35

As a fan of many authors, and with the respect I have for those who work hard to make their novels readable, I say now that this novel is very unreadable, the author hasn’t bothered to understand how to use the English language properly when writing. Errors everywhere. For those of you who keep up with this l.n. Props to you, you’re seriously a different breed. But for the author I say, read English literature, don’t stick to reading light novels all the time, because in the long run you won’t improve your English writing if you don’t have a solid grasp on the writing technique. Also read English dictionaries. And do free English lessons using an app or the internet. I can tell you’re young so you have a lot of potential. This novel is truly just your start and I hope your writing technique on your next ones will be so good they can’t even be compared to this one. Alright that’s all I wanted to say. And as a brother this novel is trash get better at writing in English bro.🤙

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Small_Otaku
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thanks for the suggestions. Yea, I will try to improve my English .

Small_Otaku
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also, After my exam finish, Me and my editor will try to edite all the previous chapter .

Small_Otaku:thanks for the suggestions. Yea, I will try to improve my English .
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