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yeairead
yeaireadLv122yr
2022-12-01 02:35

As a fan of many authors, and with the respect I have for those who work hard to make their novels readable, I say now that this novel is very unreadable, the author hasn’t bothered to understand how to use the English language properly when writing. Errors everywhere. For those of you who keep up with this l.n. Props to you, you’re seriously a different breed. But for the author I say, read English literature, don’t stick to reading light novels all the time, because in the long run you won’t improve your English writing if you don’t have a solid grasp on the writing technique. Also read English dictionaries. And do free English lessons using an app or the internet. I can tell you’re young so you have a lot of potential. This novel is truly just your start and I hope your writing technique on your next ones will be so good they can’t even be compared to this one. Alright that’s all I wanted to say. And as a brother this novel is trash get better at writing in English bro.🤙

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Small_Otaku
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Small_OtakuAuthor

thanks for the suggestions. Yea, I will try to improve my English .

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Small_Otaku
Small_OtakuAuthor

also, After my exam finish, Me and my editor will try to edite all the previous chapter .

Small_Otaku:thanks for the suggestions. Yea, I will try to improve my English .
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Small_Otaku
Small_OtakuAuthor

Hi, the author here. It's my first novel guys. I am pretty inexperienced about but I will try to become better at this. I hope you will enjoy this novel.

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Veldora_The_Goat
Veldora_The_GoatLv3

This is amazing, I’m absolutely loving this and it’s quickly become one of my favorites. I have zero complaints except for grammar and I don’t even really care about that. Can’t wait to see where the story goes, excited for the next chapter!

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Junkies
JunkiesLv13

read 40s chap , i like this kind of novel, in some area its become repetitive story thats whats the slow paced novel problem is, i like the mc act like a normal people , easy to read, im bored of those arogant novel, so this one is fresh novel for me , i will read some more-

2yr
Diana_Moreira
Diana_MoreiraLv4

Reveal spoiler

2yr
Pyrozian
PyrozianLv15

My guess is all the bad reviews are deleted, cause this is not great. It’ not a bad premise, but very definitely not small upgrades. The writing quality is grade school level, or non native English speaker level

2yr
nXo1d
nXo1dLv3

The story has a lot of potential, it is a great idea, but unfortunately has terrible execution. The fighting is explained terribly and the author makes a lot of mistakes, he forgets what he has written already, and English is clearly not his first language

2yr
Nightclerk
NightclerkLv10

First of all props for putting your story out there takes hard work to do that. now saying that , the story feels like it needs some major editing and proof reading. some of the sentences just dont make sense so wilr i say cheers for your work and story ideas, ima bow out on reading more of this. salute

2yr
GifflarGod
GifflarGodLv14

pretty good novel so far but author please re-write the chapters and use grammarly.. there are so many mistakes and the kind of mistakes that if you use even the free version of grammarly it will fix most mistakes.. or maybe even get an editor even though it costs it would be worth it as many will stop reading if the quality doesn't rise

2yr
Daoist_sweetdemise
Daoist_sweetdemiseLv3

Story OK. To be fair the author did say its his first novel and he isn't a native English speaker. And it shows. Badly. I've dropped it. I rarely drop books just because of writing quality but I couldn't continue.This was as bad as mtl. The bad ones. BUT if you can handle mtl or are not a native speaker then this isn't really a problem. As this was also the authors first work, other problems such as story pacing, character progression, character interaction and behaviour all needs work. Theres a lot of telling and very little showing. This comes with practice, time and experience.My advise to the author as simply a fan of light novels is to read more well written English novels. Not translated, but actual English novels. You'll pick up a lot and it'll help you construct your novels better in tbe future.For anyone who read all this and want an actual review.. Transmigration story where male MC gets into modern world with monsters. System makes him cultivate stronger. For once the original body isn't some begger or poor son which is actually refreshing. It's why I think this author with some work and experience can actually write a good novel in the future.

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