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2021-09-21 04:38

The Sun Elves really had me intrigued, would love to learn more about this race later via carvings, ruins or other implications. Sometimes after chapter 1 I thought it was a time loop, but then I realized it was just straight up amnesia the second chapter. The details and imagery are outstanding, but dialogue needs some work in few parts. I believe you should add "..." to give out dramatic pauses in serious events, so it doesn't feel all too lucky. Other than that, this novel is great!

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