well first of all, I've only read up until the four of them finished fighting the troll. the writing is a mess. it's either your english is bad or the way you translate it from your mother language is wrong. also, your pharagraps is too long to read comfortably, especially so for mobile users. you should've shortened it to 20-50 words. I could easily see many pharagraps having more than 50 words. the story is meh. no innovation from the canon, pretty much just MC being a side character in the overall story. the idea for the MC is not bad. though the author haven't explain properly how the MC gained his powers. don't know if the author will explain it in the future chapter. don't care, i won't continue reading it anyway.
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hmm, well, thanks for your review. You are a little right in some parts, in fact, the paragraphs tended to be long in the first chapters and it was something that improved little by little while I improved my way of writing and as I think I have said enough and if I am not wrong it also says in the description, this version is translated by google translator, so if suddenly there are parts that are not understandable, it would be reasonable, on the other hand, I usually try to see that the translation comes out coherent, but you never know. As for what you say about following the cannon, it was something that actually happened in the first chapters and was seen a lot in the first year of hogwarts, but later that fact changes. This is the first story I've written so when I first started writing there were a lot of mistakes and it's only with the passage of time that they've been reduced, which is clearly visible in the first few chapters, anyway I plan to update the current chapters , so maybe he will improve his writing in case you consider giving him another chance, cheers.
oh, speaking of the origin of his powers, this question is strange, I think it is something quite clear, maybe you did not pay much attention
can't wait tell new chapters come in
