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2023-02-19 21:32

The writing is still stiff, but significantly better after editing. The one problem I had with this story on scribblehub was just how hard it was to read. The story itself wasn't exactly professional writing, but engaging and better than a lot of what is out there. The world building is handled well and most of the time rolled into the story telling rather than wild info dumps. I'm glad I can actually read this now without getting a fatigue headache from constantly having to mentally edit the story.

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