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Seeing the celestial forge I was excited at first but the application of not only the forge abilities but the extreme use of cliches has killed my desire to read. This could have been a great read if done slightly differently. Grammar is understandable. The entire writing style is less a story and more of a diary entry or maybe a checklist, there is very little dialog that isn't cut into ''I explained this to that person' World building is stuffed so full of every cliche from every Harry Potter fanfic that it loses any charm.