Review Detail of Akira_Monadelle in Karma Of Vengeance

This was quite good for the author's first novel. The writer's intentions were clear and he clearly had a steady plot in mind. However, there is a LOT to complain about. I'm guessing English isn't the author's first language. The story itself wasn't bad but the English was absolutely terrible. Errors from all aspects of english were everwhere, straight throughout. Grammar, punctuation and capitalization needed the most work. Starting with the title, why is it in common letters? Titles are supposed to be written like how it is on your book cover, words starting with capital letters. The synopsis was poorly structured and confusing. For some reason, all the writer's sentences started with common letters. Sentences should always start with a capital letter. The novel started well without these errors for like the first few paragraphs of chapter 1 then it just gradually started getting worse and worse. Sentences started with common letters and names were in common letters. Please note that names should start with capital letters. There wasn't a proper flow and the story seemed rushed. There were also too many redundancies. The author is clearly trying to get the reader to admire the mc and sympathize with him but I just find him stupid and annoying. The reader would probably sympathize more if we knew why he was always being beaten up and why he needed to save others. Being beat up because of being weak and "saving" people because his father asked him to isn't very sufficient. I'm not saying you should change his reasoning but try and make it a bit more substantial. I recommend that the author use granmarly to assist with his writing or get himself an editor. Overall, this novel has a lot of potential but is seriously plagued by poor grammar and English skills. I find the plot very interesting and would love to continue reading but the errors are just too unbearable. This was my honest review, I hope you can work on your craft and get better and better. [img=recommend]