Review Detail of Itsuwa_Sora in Omniverse Mayhem

This is good story, have good idea, and it's readable. But for me it's not enjoyable, it's because the author literally make a comment in every paragraph without notice or Mark or whatever you call it, that make this story less enjoyable for me. It's good to interaction with your reader but of you to much interaction like that it Will make your story less enjoyable. Beside from that everything is good.