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2021-09-04 04:32

I was originally going to lit 4.8 stars but I changed my mind because of how much I love this story. The only reason I was about to put 4.8 satrs instead of A perfect 5 stars is because I NEED MORE UPDATES!!!!!!!!!! I absolutely love EVERYTHING about this soooo much!!! My mom thought I was loosing my mind cuz I kept making weird noises while reading this…. Anyway, I highly recommend this!! ⭐️ ⭐️⭐️🤤⭐️⭐️

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