Review Detail of Ailund95 in The Rogue System [BL]

I made it to chapter 86 (first ark still). I liked this book starting out. You could tell the author had put thought into it and the characters and world felt fleshed out. Some of the interactions between characters were a bit odd at first, like the author was leaving the character roles open before deciding on who they would be to the MC (like who treats their brother like that?). Forgivable. Testing the waters is normal. Then the writing style changed to tv action/hero perspective. It wasnt all that bad at first. The scenes weren’t very descriptive and there was a lot of dialog. Not bad, there just wasn’t a lot of context on the expressions and emotion of the dialog. Then, then the whole thing turned into a weird action/hero teen drama. What was that marvel like backstory/setup? Bro, why is there so much awkward back and forth between the characters? Some scenes repeated (when Z watches himself use powers with A). There’s a lot of push and pull that could be shortened and adultified to make it more cohesive. Honestly, around chapter 50ish the characters start to feel like the same person. Before that they only felt a little OOC occasionally. Also, dear author, please get an editor. There were some jumbled sentences and sad structures. It was a bit painful. It started good, got not so good, and I don’t have the patience for it to get better. I appreciate the time and effort it took to write it all up though. Hope the author gets more sleep and a good editor d;