The start of your story is really great. the plot of your story is strong. The arrangements of the characters are superb. keep it up, dear. You have done a great job.

They are only a few chapters of this book so I can't really say much but according to what I was reading so far it's pretty much a good read and an interesting plot too ,just a few mistakes here and there but that can be dwelt with in no time so Author please do your best and make this book the best ever to read and good job in writing it too never let anyone tell you ,you can't write because you can!!!

The author has good writing skills....The story is uderstandable and discription is very vivid..... i like the story but author released only 2 chapter so i will add this book into my library this instance to know what happen next.... i hope for this book growth [img=recommend]

The story only has 2 chapters out so far, so I can't really do a proper review, but from what I've gathered so far the story line seemed pretty interesting. The way how the story was written was a little hard to read, just need to fix a few of the grammar and words and it'll make it a little easier to read. The book is written in in a script like manner and there isn't much about the surrounding or the world. However I do like the part where the author notifies us of when the character changes so we can properly adjust the scenes accordingly. If the author is looking for advice, maybe try adding a little more about the world, where it is taking place, a little about the smells, the food. Build the environment a little. Besides that, I do think it'll be an interesting story line. Don't give up! Keep up the good work author! You got this!