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PrugnaKerai
PrugnaKeraiLv23yr
2021-09-10 02:30

What a great story and an amazing start! The narration is smooth amd the read was exciting. However, I would say that the, grammar and punctuation need refining, especially where there is dialogue. For example, there should always be some form of punctuation before the closing speech marks, but there is almost always missing; also, I have noticed that 'Shiro' is sometimes missing his capital letter at the beginning of his name. There are some areas where the expression of language could be tweaked and adjusted so that it would allow the story to optimally flow. I think I read in one of the other reviews that this is the author's first book, and if this is the case then they have done a brilliant job. Congratulations, definetly a recommended read, the author should be proud of themselves!

SHIN SEKAI: A RAIDEN'S RACING HEART

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SF_Writes
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Wow. This is awesome. The blurb itself is so catchy. The fantasy genre has a separate fanbase and I am sure this book is going to be a "thunder" there. [img=coins]. Keep up the good work author

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Deborah_John_8098
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A good book that keeps you on your toes Good story idea and nice writing style I highly recommend this novel Thumbs up to the author for a job well done

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Layefa_25
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I like the fact that you used the Nigerian god's. The story is captivating, I strongly recommend this addition to your library. Keep up the good work.

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Moorfiction
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The plot is to die for! I love the main character, the writing reminded me of harry potter, fantasy novels are not my thing but I enjoyed this, well-done author!!

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Unusualdee
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Woah 😍, I love this book, it's awesome and well written 😁 😁 😁. Kudos to the writer 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍 😍

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Melchisedec
MelchisedecLv3

The story starts off on a high note with Shin, a character I actually came to love by reading further. Though the chapters are relatively short, they are still full of substance and energy that would keep you invested till as it goes on. Nice one 👌👍

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Scarlettheartt
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The story of the book is so good. The first chapter entertains you a lot and at the end, you get hooked on the book. You have used the Nigerian gods and that new concept I am reading. Great work. Your storytelling is great. Great book to read. All the best for the future. 👍👍👍

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TheMortalGod
TheMortalGodLv1

The first chapter ends with a bang. I like how it's a kind of glimpse into the future, keeps you interested in knowing what led to this incident. The character development in each chapter looks promising indeed, along with the general direction of the plot.

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_Jaeee
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The story was very well written, making every scene and events more alive in the reader's imagination! The Author has a unique way of writing, which gives the book more potential to succeed!

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