Review Detail of Akira_Monadelle in New Place, New name

The title of the novel is very good, it makes the reader think there will be some comedy or a cocky MC, however as I read I saw none of these. Firstly, the synopsis gave away too much. The reader could easily know what was going to happen in the novel before even reading it. I recommend that you work on the synopsis. I only read two chapters and I must say I was confused straight throughout. I couldn't understand how the mc was supposed to be new to the system and was fighting like he had been using the system for a long time. There was no plot development and no character development. In the first few chapters too many things were thrown at the reader and the story was to fast paced and had too many loop holes. Punctuation and grammar needed work too. The novel structure was quite strange and the chapters were incredibly short with little to no substance. I recommend you read some novels that fall under the same genre as yours to assist you with your writing. I'm sorry if some of what I said seemed harsh but this is my honest review. I hope you can take what I said into consideration and improve the quality of the novel. I believe that it truly has potential.