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NightlyWinter
NightlyWinterLv23yr
2021-09-22 21:43

This story is on to a good start. The characters have conflicts that makes people feel sad and feel for them. Good enough at least. The depth of the story and characters are lacking a little, but not enough to put off the readers. There are spelling and punctuation mistakes, but it's not too severe to confuse someone badly. In the end, keep it up! The story is good so far.

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theforce1579
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theforce1579
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Hey guys, shameless author review here. I hope you guys like and enjoy what you have read till now and please look forward to more. I could not post for the past week(5th September)2021 because I had a family emergency and was not in the right mindset to write. Rest assured, chapters will be updated on schedule from now on

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Red_Venerable
Red_VenerableLv11

Holy cow, this god me addicted almost in instant! Great backstory, gives great view on character's emotional state. Keep it up. I'll be waiting for more chapters!

3yr
Jane_Chunli
Jane_ChunliLv3

Nice work author-nim, sincerely speaking. it got me hooked, I felt the boy's emotional pains. I wondered how he survived through his elementary school days without being mentally unstable. I'm still reading author and I must say I like the storyline

3yr
The_Procrastinator
The_ProcrastinatorLv4

Reveal spoiler

3yr
Scarlet_Wolf96
Scarlet_Wolf96Lv2

very good story. Plot writing is very interesting and intrigued me. especially in writing the prologue is also interesting. I learned a lot while reading this. but what I noticed is, the lack of depth to the characters written when giving the impression of Dark or sad. well, I know because it's still early so... nevermind. apart from that, good job and keep the spirit to write

3yr
Sky_Li
Sky_LiLv3

First of all Writing quality is on point!👌 And the descriptions are very well placed, the prologue looks nice and it's great how you pointed out the ML suffering but I think you need to add more feelings to the book to make it more realistic but ilobed the FL povs, all the more it's a great work and keep up the good work !👍✨

3yr
NobleQueenBee
NobleQueenBeeLv5

So much emotion! This is well written and clearly gives the character’s motivation and backstory. I found my heart aching for the the characters, and I was very intrigued by the concept. I will definitely be reading more. Great work, author!!

3yr
MiuNovels
MiuNovelsLv13

writing quality is good. nothing to say here but keep it up. the stroy development, for me, is balance. a little bit of the mcs past through prologues are okay. character designs are on point. its vivid in my imagination [img=recommend] and their personality comes out. updates .i couldnt say anything since its a new novel world background, we'll see in the fture. its still new keep up the good work [img=recommend]

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Tales_Within_Me
Tales_Within_MeLv11

That's quite a god beginning. The prologue was... intriguing. The world building was short but precise. Looking forward to more updates in the future. And Character development, it's going good. Let's wait and see how he will turn out, a hero or an anti hero. I wonder...

3yr
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