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2023-05-17 02:07

Reading the chapters of your story, I could see how you were improving. I hope you will continue to write. Good luck![img=update][img=update]

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Author Review: Hello, dear readers! As the author of this thrilling narrative, it's only natural that I hold it in the highest regard. I'd like to share with you some compelling reasons why I believe you will find this story to be an exceptional reading experience: 1. A Unique Narrative Structure: Contrary to the popular tropes of system-based narratives or harem elements, this story stands apart. 2. A Grounded Protagonist: Our main character isn't a reincarnate, rather, he's someone who feels real and relatable, navigating the world with a sense of familiarity. 3. A Nod to Naruto Fans: If you're a fan of the iconic Naruto series, this fanfic has been crafted with you in mind. While the story stands on its own merit, it pays tribute to the beloved Naruto universe in a way that's both respectful and refreshing. 4. Faithful to Naruto Lore: The story maintains integrity to the original Naruto lore, honoring the physics and the unique essence that has enamored millions worldwide. 5. A Well-rounded Love Interest: Our protagonist isn't just chasing after a hollow romantic trope. His love interest is a fully developed character who contributes significantly to the plot, steering clear of the clichéd background or merely sexualized roles. 6. A Balanced Hero: Despite his formidable abilities, our main character isn't immune to setbacks. He experiences growth, challenge, and evolution, appealing to readers who appreciate a realistic trajectory of character development. 7. Emotional Depth: This isn't just an action-packed tale. It's a journey that delves deep into the emotional landscapes of the characters, making them as relatable as they are exciting. 8. Rich World Building: The story is set in a well-detailed universe, with dedicated arcs to expand and explore the world, enhancing the reading experience. 9. Quality Writing: As an author, I take pride in delivering a well-written narrative. While occasional grammatical errors may occur, they are few and far between, ensuring an enjoyable read. 10. Respectful Relationships: Rest assured, the relationships in this story are founded on respect and mutual consent, steering clear of questionable dynamics often found in fanfics. 11. A Listening Author: I value my readers' opinions and am always open to constructive feedback and plot suggestions. I encourage you to give this story a fair shot. Read a good chunk (at least 15 chapters) before making up your mind. I believe you will find yourself immersed in a narrative that's both respectful to the Naruto universe and uniquely engaging in its own right. Happy reading!

Kakashi_4686
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5/5- Why? Although at the beginning it is very descriptive with not much dialogue, it quickly changes, I guess the Author improved and put a lot more dialogue, while retaining its description. I think in the latest chapters there is a perfect balance between dialogue and description (chapter 17+). Also, when character talk, they are not just talking, but you can see the tone of voice and emotion. Also, I think is done very well, it describes character emotions really well. The characters feel natural but also a bit different which makes sense since there's a person which never got brought into their life in the original series. For world background, although we haven't seen much, but when we do it goes into a lot of description talking about the mood, sunset, the surroundings etc. And to be fair, its described really well. The writing quality is really good. You probably won't find any grammar mistakes, I at least haven't found any. The writing is clear and gives its point straightforwardly while keeping its complexity, making anyone able to understand. It also uses verbs and adjectives that not many use, which I love since it helps improve my vocabulary and sets it apart from other stories. Another important thing. While the story is a pretty happy setting, and it gives off a nice atmosphere and slice of life, which is refreshing since every fanfic nowadays are just about killing and stuff. However, the story does still retain its drama and plot, there is killing and stuff. So I guess it good of both worlds. So, I think anyone can enjoy this. Although not everyone, girls tend to enjoy more happy stuff and boys enjoy more action. This fanfic has both incorporated into it. For those that like plot, from what we have been shown in the latest chapter- Cloaked in Deception, it shows that there is a plot. The story while retaining its cannon counterpart, does have a different plot, which doesn't seemed forced. For power scaling, while MC is pretty strong for his age, him being 5. I don't think its unrealistic considering Kakashi at his age and who the MC trains with. The fanfic also has retained Naruto physics and when its not mentioned in the original series, the author does a good job explaining it. Also MC has his setbacks and is not just soloing everyone and winning every fight. For update stability, I'd say its really good. The author updates regularly and each chapter is pretty long, I'd say around 3000 words and takes me a few minutes to finish it. From what I've seen the longest the author has gone without updating is 5 days, and he mentioned its because he decided to take a few days off from writing. While no romantic interest has been shown yet, the author has said, that it will not be harem and will be one love interest. Also, he mentioned that the love interest will not just be sexualised partner but someone who can stand and fight alongside him. So, I'm looking forward to it. And from what the author has shown I think it will be done well. Conclusion: Overall, I think everyone should try this fanfic. It has a bit of everything, whether you like slice-of-life, action, some dark aspects, plot, originality, no-harem etc. Also, the author is very engaging, and responds to question, replies and likes.

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