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Kiyoung
KiyoungLv43yr
2021-09-13 04:03

Excellent story and concept ruined by bad writing skills. Most of the sentences don't make sense and are grammatically incorrect. Like this from CH-6: "And the astonishing fact is that in this world and women are born equal and whoever trains can become strong regardless of their gender." This sentence can be written a lot better..... Is this MTL? The only time I've ever seen something written this bad was using MTL, and that's compared to bad MTLs. I hope author improves his writing skills. Try running it through Grammarly or a proofreader. This novel has a lot of potential.

Yandere Instruction Manual

Zayn_Nicolas
4.5
42 Chs

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Zayn_Nicolas
Zayn_NicolasAuthor

I have corrected all the mistakes and try to notify me as it made me quite happy to see someone reading my novel seriously.

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Zayn_Nicolas
Zayn_NicolasAuthor

Your author here and after one month of writing I wrote this review. You will get all the yandere women you want and proper harem with enough character development. While there will be adventures and action the main part will be romance and relationships. As well this novel will contain a lot of mythologies from all cultures. So if you are either from harem or no harem sect give it a try as it has fairly good romance in it.

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Kindread4440
Kindread4440Lv12

Saw the cover, saw the introduction, saw the name, headed in. Saw the contents, saw the update schedule, saw the characters, and am now too deep in and request author for more chapters...

3yr
LawWillOblivionK
LawWillOblivionKLv13

First review. This novel is a good read for Yandere Lovers. Writing Quality: Almost no grammatical errors. Stability of Updates: 1 chapter a day Stroy Development: Can be improved in the first life of the mc. The second life of the mc is developing nicely. Character Design: Well Designed. World Background: The first world was lacking but the second is coming along well. Character Interaction: This part can be developed especially in his first living with his wife The mc is good. He loves his Yanderes. But he does not like his Yanderes killing people(Women) he talks with.He can be more developed.Aside from that, it is one of the best Yandere Novels on this site. If it goes according to the current quality.

3yr
DaoistaaX2ld
DaoistaaX2ldLv2

Author definitely do not stop writing, I think this novel will be very popular in the future. I wish you continued success S Sfhdfhhhsgşjsjkdjkdgjkvgjıhggy S

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VirginOlives
VirginOlivesLv3

Good story. It has a proper prologue and my favourite type of system. Which is a smart one 😂😂. The systems purpose is to guide him and help him which is better than systems that give random task that they have to complete. And also the love interest/s are all yandere.

3yr
Kamalpreet_Punia
Kamalpreet_PuniaLv1

well the story development is to fast if author can make the development a more creative and in steady pace than this story can be very good and interesting I read first some chapter the story development the character development with each other characters just to fast I hope author can understand what I want tell

3yr
PrimordialKiller
PrimordialKillerLv13

i love this novel .it's quality is good.Everything about it is good. Make him type a overpowered mc like assassin type ( i quite like assasin, only if it matches the novel) & i don't mind if his women are stronger than him because its fun. I hope the author to be well and healthy. MAKE UPDATES DAILY

3yr
cynic_0
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