your novel is good in my opinion, but unfortunately the impression of the story is too forced and too rushed, a whereas in the world of Arifureta if the writer thinks carefully you can make more than 50 chapters without depending on the canon, such as traveling or traveling around the world of Arifureta or adding followers or slaves, or you can also eliminate the False god.... and when in the HOTD world it also seems too forced, basically everything looks too forced so it's a bit disgusting or cringy when you read it, I hope you take this FF novel seriously again, even though the MC background is good but what I don't like is about the storyline process what the author told me about, so I hope that in the future it will be improved again!!
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yeah i was new to writing at the time, i had so many ideas that i completely rushed through, even forgot some things i did. I hope to rewrite this novel and make those parts better, maybe during the summer when i have time. This could’ve easily been dozens of chapters longer with what i’ve set up. Thanks for the review, thanks for reading.
