Review Detail of CannibalTurtle in Adam: The Vagabond

This story shows great potential for growth. I do like how the paragraphs are sometimes more sparse as they elicit a sort of mystery when the sentences are left hanging. I was glad to see that some of the actual sounds are replaced by onomatopoeia in the later chapters but maybe try not to utilise them so much as although they are great tools to have in writing, some of the magic effects will be lost when used superfluously. The world-building is great and is the best part of the novel.