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JJ_Prakoso
JJ_PrakosoLv13yr
2021-09-16 22:07

Here are my thoughs about this novel based from what I read so far: World-Building: I genuinely like the school environment and even the character whereabouts. It's quite decent and I think as slice of life, it's fine one. Character: I really like the character in this story. They are all have different personalities and quite likable. I also like that the author give a good characterization of the adult which is great. However, I do want to see all the main cast or even the side character development and develop more the monarch of butterfly concept in future chapters. Overall, I think this one is solid slice of life story with deeper meaning and metaphorical. However, I am sorry to say this, I suggest to reduce the wall of text into two or three paragraph to give some break time for the readers eyes. Keep up the good work!!!!

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Thank you for your honest review! I'll keep your critiques in mind!

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What a wonderful read for a while. Review Proper Writing Quality. The narratives are good and easy to read. I also love the length in each chapters. Also the author is quite creative in her writing even the title is well thought. 馃槏馃槏馃槏 Story Development. It is great and smooth sailing. I love how detailed it is and see no plotholes as I read. The struggles of Aurora with her cancer and how she cope up with it, the lives of people around her is very real and could be relatable as well. Character Design. First is the mc, Aurora. She felt so real. The author is really great at expressing Aurora's self, her dilemas, worries and emotions. The same with the other characters, her friends also felt so real. They all have different circumstances they are facing and the bonds they shared together is truly something touching. You could felt their emotions and very relatable I also love Aurora's family too 馃槶馃槶馃槶 Updates. So far it is stable 馃挅 World Background. The author knows well her stuff especially with those medical terms. Oh, and also those philosophies, love it all. And nothing really feels off or too much of an info dump. It mix well with the story. Overall once you read this, you could see the time, thoughts, heart and efforts the author put into this story. In which, it really make me appreciate everything I read. Just still in chapter 10, but I love the progress of the story so far and will continue the rest. Great work, author! This would stay definintely to my colls. Recommended? Definitely! If you want some fresher for all those system, reincarnation, and other common stuffs here at WN, then definitely read this. It has a nice slice of life where as you read, you would gain, reflect and enjoy alot of things as a reader.

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