Review Detail of Toto420254 in Vampire Lord

Hello, the author here! I had this great idea about a vampire who was sent into a classic fantasy setting of elves, dwarfs, dragons, and humans with magic and all that jazz. I didn't find any story stories like that so I decided to write my own. I'm not very great at writing but hopefully, it's clear enough to understand. I don't mind getting advice or people pointing out mistakes, or parts of the story not adding up. I actually prefer if someone mentioned it since at times I have a hard time seeing those small mistakes.