_kagamineakiraLv33yr

2021-08-12 03:49

4.6 for new my buddy, the story not advance enough for that. Here's my comment from Discord: I think what is a very good material, so, if you can add bit for bit more content, probably will be a excelent story, in my opinion, this looks very good where it is headed. Although the theme that the protagonist is an omnipotent being is almost trite, I think that on very few occasions do you look at a protagonist who is literally the [God] of that world from the beginning, assuming a role as administrator of the [System] in his own universe, but here is the detail, you should explain what the system is and who created it, since apparently, it only designated the protagonist as its [User] but not as its creator, right? So, I think maybe you should be a little careful as a slip in the information could ruin the plot of the story. But anyway, you have good material as I said previously, take things slowly and keep an eye on the progress of your story, I'll keep reading it :)

The Precursor

universe_creation

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