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2022-03-06 16:38

It's depressing about how it down spiraled from something that caught my interest to become something I regret even started reading about. The first 40 chapters were good and I actually kind of loved it. I wished for more but I would say I'm pretty disgusted at this point... Mountains upon mountains of redundant paragraphs. Copies of chapters everywhere almost as if to steal the fast passes and coins. The entire story is so broken that it's impossible to read. I'm kind of impressed how something that was going well could be made to become something so terrible like this... I regret trying to read this and to others who are going to read this, unless the author is going to edit his released chapters, don't even try to read these broken paragraphs of words. It is not apparent at the beginning but recent chapters are extremely bad to even read

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