dude, your pokemon story is the best (I even think that your world is better than the original), but... and here are a few minuses that make it less comfortable to read (I even signed up for this): 1) you don’t need to mention in the text when the GG’s pokemon reach the micro-stat (from a to s), the GG has several dozen pokemon and you shouldn’t devote a lot of time to this, okay if he had 5-10 of them, but he really has them fucking and tart the plot on such a crowd is too stupid, 2) try not to describe new pokemon stats for half a chapter 3) micro-nuances: - this is what I still swim in your names of the days of the week, and you mention them too often and almost get lost in it all (better be 1 day, 2 day of the week, etc.) -you devote a lot of time to describing objects (we are here for the adventures of GG in this gigantic world, and not for describing how he chooses a few chapters of a couple of pebbles))) p.s. the author, let's have more plot and adventures, and not stats and descriptions of materials, because you created a huge world with a bunch of continents !!!!))) and most of the chapters you spend on describing micro-breakthroughs and breaking the limit of each of the crowd of pokemons p.s.s, author, really cool fanfic, keep writing this masterpiece, and don't take it to heart that I only wrote cons because everything else is just super, I just didn't focus on the pros of your work
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