First things first, grammar is terrible, dont know what hes trying to say most of the time, who is saying it, and in what perspective or in what aspect. Obviously its hard to actually read and understand the story if your confused on what your reading. Second, the story is average, but the pacing and plot seems very forced at times, especially at the beginning where your barely even processing what's going on. Third and hopefully the last, ther is little to no description on the backstory of the character aside from the hologram he got from his father or whatever, and in the first place to understand the main character he needs to have character, which he doesn't, instead of fleshing the mc out a bit more, he's just forced straight into a random situation that decides his possible future without any context.

This story is unintelligible. The grammar is incredibly poor and it seems like chunks of info are just randomly missing here and there, characters are called different names at different times which is common with mtl. I read three chapters where I had no clue what was going on, what was dialogue and what was narration, not who was speaking when it seemed likely it was dialogue.