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Zontal_Zev
Zontal_ZevAuthor3yr
2021-07-26 22:52

I'm now a shameless review writer. This is the second novel that I have written. Actually, this is a remake of my previous novel, so you can consider this my first novel. Because the previous novel that I made used my first language and the story I felt was not satisfactory.I finally decided to remake. I can't say that my novel is good but I'll let you guys judge for yourself If you see a mistake I'm sorry, English is not my first language. I would really appreciate it if you guys support me, thank you.

Berserk Stick System

Zontal_Zev
4.5
165 Chs

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AngelyDarky
AngelyDarkyLv14

Como você pode não achar maravilhoso o seu próprio livro/tesouro, estou amando tanto! é o melhor livro de eroge que descobri! tenha mais auto-estima! Autor-sama! você merece todas as 5.0 estrelas! se alguém criticar juro que vou esfolar esse ser cego! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

3yr
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LoveYandereEil40
LoveYandereEil40Lv2

Чел есть много таких авторов но имино твой ми читаем так что продалжай пажалуста

3yr
Agung_7230
Agung_7230Lv1

mantav bang [img=recommend] teruskan!! hehe. ..

3yr
Zontal_Zev
Zontal_ZevAuthor

ASW *&$&%$&%*%*^(

Agung_7230:mantav bang [img=recommend] teruskan!! hehe. ..
3yr
MyLovely
MyLovelyLv4

WHT is the new discord.gg link can someone please share it

3yr
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Zontal_Zev
Zontal_ZevAuthor

? Is the discord link I gave no longer usable?

MyLovely:WHT is the new discord.gg link can someone please share it
3yr
YAGOOEMON
YAGOOEMONLv4

viral kan bang biar rame generasi micin +62

3yr
haremphobic
haremphobicLv15

How can yandere and harem go together author I think you should put more thought in a book if your gonna write one🤦🏾

3yr
Arthur_Leywin1
Arthur_Leywin1Lv4

Author, this is a great novel but I suggest to turn the novel cover to quilin girl. It was far better than this

3yr
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ratty_islandr
ratty_islandrLv13

Read “my disciples are yanderes”

haremphobic:How can yandere and harem go together author I think you should put more thought in a book if your gonna write one🤦🏾
3yr
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Rayoub_sk
Rayoub_skLv13

hi , i was wondering wil you ever re-edit your chapters when your english gets better ? it s a genuine question to know if i should put it in my waiting list thanks

3yr
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Daoist686135
Daoist686135Lv1

oh yes that one is a good one

ratty_islandr:Read “my disciples are yanderes”
3yr
Lazy_Chicken_God
Lazy_Chicken_GodLv13

Are you taking a break?

3yr
Dreamstrafe
DreamstrafeLv15

did you drop?

3yr
A_reader_for_fun
A_reader_for_funLv12

I didn’t like the yuri in it, but orher then that it is a good novel

ratty_islandr:Read “my disciples are yanderes”
3yr
Zzz_808
Zzz_808Lv3

you saved me

A_reader_for_fun:I didn’t like the yuri in it, but orher then that it is a good novel
2yr
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Steven_Anguiano
Steven_AnguianoLv3

2yr
Yuuki_Rito_7228
Yuuki_Rito_7228Lv1

if there is NTR in this or mc forget the girls in harmen i will hate you (won't read)

2yr
Huntsman_2101
Huntsman_2101Lv12

Nope

Zontal_Zev:? Is the discord link I gave no longer usable?
2yr
Carmen_March
Carmen_MarchLv15

I hope you are still continuing the story. I have been waiting a week for more chapters. please continue

2yr
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8ightbit
8ightbitLv4

Here's my opinion of this novel. it started out fine, the character building wasn't very bad, and the world building was good too and I enjoyed the beginning. But then the MC became "Bipolar" what he does and what he says, keep jumping all over the place. Sometimes doesn't even make sense and the comedy skits, becomes cringeworthy. I mean, If you're 10 years old you might like it.. which isn't realistic as this is an 18+ novel, but me as an adult, I can't. So the big question is, who is the target audience for this novel?. Idk.. This is just my opinion/review Writing Quality - 3/5 SOF - 5/5 Story Dev - 2/5 Character Design - 3/5 World background - 4/5 Overall 3.4/5

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WoofWoof
WoofWoofLv6

It is pretty good. but the english is really bad. Better than MTL. There are a few things being inaccurate, anatomy doesnt seem to agree with author.

3yr
ThighLover
ThighLoverLv3

The protagonist is a boy for the ones who were confused on the synopsis. The story is also good so far, hoping to see more updates. [img=update][img=update]

3yr
Lord666Acedia
Lord666AcediaLv5

Its not even funny anymore how much pedo this novel is, only going for children 10-16 yrs old exclusively

3yr
Seikai
SeikaiLv2

What can I say? Chinanumbawan is written all over this. It's a tad higher than those MTL Novels but still... it's something like a High Mid-tier Tr@sh.

3yr
Avengtank
AvengtankLv5

every encounter seems forced , i read upto 50+ chapters and its seems like i am reading something with no proper background or any interesting story development . After reading the synopsis i though if a story is inspired by Little Tyrant how bad the story progression can go? But the Author showed that , he can make is so bad that even an interesting plot can be made into lackluster and girls collection story. I guess Author did not remember the Little Tyrant story part but just the wet dreams he had after reading Little Tyrant . I had high hopes while reading 20+ chapter which was going quite well , but it took a nose dive.

3yr
ArmoredNT
ArmoredNTLv13

The book started out decently and just got worse and worse as it went along. The relationships and the comedy just feel forced. The mc waisted all his time during a six year time skip resulting in no progression. The mc also doesn’t use his points properly making it quite frustrating

2yr
WarrantyW
WarrantyWLv4

Love the story so far, thanks.[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Jinzou
JinzouLv12

the novel characteristic are heavily on a game mechanic rather than a reality mechanic so u can expect 'all u can do mc' without proper progress battle experience and reason

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