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JJ_Prakoso
JJ_PrakosoLv23yr
2021-09-01 00:29

Here are my thoughts based from what I read so far, World Building: Well to be honest the world building decent especially with the village and the vampire place. I also like that author indeed shows some of the atmosphere in this world especially with the vampire side. But, I truly believe the author will expand more about the world itself and how the human will react with the vampire especially the main girl, Elsa. Character; I personally think the characters in this novel are very distinct with one another either on appearance and even the personality. Gabriel is ruthless type of vampire that love to speak in dramatic fashion, while Elsa is typical clumsy girl that I hope the author giver her development and also Gabriel too. Because of those character development, it can make the story more exciting to read. Overall, I do like the author smooth writing style and quite descriptive at the same time, but I also find some nitpicky things in my opinion. Which is I found in some chapters, there are a dialogue that becoming a wall of text or just very long dialogue that become like a paragraph even thought only one character speaks. My suggestion about this is just spacing out the dialogue or give a brief context before continue the dialogue if only one character talks. Thank you very much and Keep up the good work!! ![img=recommend]

Vampire's Obsession

Pixiepiu
4.8
20 Chs

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Pixiepiu
PixiepiuAuthor

Thank you so much and you had to read more to see the characters development. character development has been done with each chapter.

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JJ_Prakoso
JJ_PrakosoLv2

Ok noted, thanks

Pixiepiu:Thank you so much and you had to read more to see the characters development. character development has been done with each chapter.
3yr
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The book cover is fantastic as it made me excited to read the novel even before opening it. I also like the way how Gabriel is described. It's a mix of mystery and fear.

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mrant12
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Very intriguing start. Well done author! The pace, word building, writing style are all good. It's still in the early phases of the story, and I look forward to more chapters from the author!

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Comfort_Wilson
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So let me start by saying, the book cover alone made me want to read it and when I did I just had to keep it, am a huge fan of vampires so this book got me smiling, the ruthless vampire made my heart swell 😉keep up the good work author.

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Inferior_Macaroni
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I've never been a fan of vampire based novels due to it being an over used genre or if used written about like some sloppy Twilight romance knock-off. But this is more gritty. Well done to the author for using a horse instead of flogging a dead one.

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SabergKeys
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The story is amazing, I enjoyed reading the entire novel, so please keep the chapters and never leave it be. The characters are lovable for me, especially since I love this type of setting in a story. but... I don't mean to offend you or anything, but update the chapters and learn how to use correct punctuations.

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ric3cak3
ric3cak3Lv1

Twilight meets Beauty and the Beast! Love Elsa already and I'm barely ten chapters in. Her pure innocence is honestly so refreshing! I can't wait to see how her personality contrasts with our MC. A small complaint is that there are a few grammatical errors, but it doesn't ruin the overall reading experience. Honestly, I'd say it doesn't even matter, especially when the plotline is so interesting. Great work author!!

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Darine_ALRAMMAH
Darine_ALRAMMAHLv1

Your style creates a sense of fear and excitement in the readers mind. The character design is just perfect. I am eager to read more of this novel, i have it has a lot of plot twists in store! The book cover is on fire! I got interested the moment i saw it. Added to library! I hope you exceed my expectations!

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Jonkohrr
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Reveal spoiler

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Tomorrowceases
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Amazing start! And that's rarely a common occurrence among new novels. Nothing to say about the stability of updates, author is doing well. Characters well crafted thus far, easy to connect to them. World background also well developed. I can't wait to see more. A good read overall, keep it up, author-kun! I'll be looking forward to read what's yet to come.

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