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2021-08-18 22:21

Love the cover page! It's original and very catchy. First of all, I have to confess that vampires, elves, etc... that's not my cup of coffee, but I will try to be objective ;) The plot is intriguing, and I have got an impression from the first few chapters that you have an idea for the whole story (a huuuuge plus for that). Your characters are interesting, you describe the backgorund from the beginning. I think you're doing great! Don't worry about the errors, we all make them. Ask your readers to point it, so it will be easier for you to correct them. Good luck with the contest!

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