the idea of the story is very good only that mc is already op from the first chapter, the length of the chapters is good but the publication is almost random, the grammar is ok the dialogues are almost non-existent and there is mc who only talks about the powers he has and who trains them, mc is too op already from the second chapter can modify space to infinity and manipulate almost everything (vectors, biology, matter, energy etc ...), there is hardly any progression in the character of the mc, more than a story it looks like a diary told in the first person, the story speaks how he brainwashes and makes the place better but doesn't explain how and what he does, honestly the story could have had good potential but how it was written ruined a lot of things
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I agree with your statements but I corrected those mistakes in the later chapters.
