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Review Detail of kylino in Invincible's Kryptonian Twin

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kylino
kylinoLv311mthkylino

this is şhit bro mc is wimp and also don't want to change the future why not go after eve oh because she and mark was together in the original bullşhit then you went and introduce this maya girl from another comic that's bullşhit it would be better if the mc was single and also the mc is earth protector like isn't mark already there I can predict this will just be like the original with the mc following cannon because hes scared to mess up the future bro your whole existence has mess up the future god also doesn't the mc knows the future why is he surprise when omni man killed the guardians *sigh* im not tell you how to write your story but a mc that is the opposite of mark(cold,ruthless,maybe evil) and have a big ambition like being a ruler or becoming the strongest no matter what morally would of been good also you made the mc study alot for what just to make a suit all that knowledge the mc has are not being used well this is şhit if your here for a naive mc with no ambition and the same as the original the this is for you

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Invincible's Kryptonian Twin

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Abuali1
Abuali1Lv1Abuali1

correction 55

lightbringer_007:correction 53
Hunter_101
Hunter_101Lv3Hunter_101

thanks if not for the review I'd waste time

marcelll3214
marcelll3214Lv2marcelll3214

Exactly. Why write a fanfic when your mc does nothing? i would rather watch original cartoon or read a comic

FadeKnight
FadeKnightLv2FadeKnight

It’s a fanfiction. A good one so far. Things aren't supposed to go according to the original. He can add whoever he wants. It’s too early to say the character is bad. I really don’t know why 8 people agree with you.

KING_IN_YELLOW
KING_IN_YELLOWLv3KING_IN_YELLOW

correction 26

FadeKnight:It’s a fanfiction. A good one so far. Things aren't supposed to go according to the original. He can add whoever he wants. It’s too early to say the character is bad. I really don’t know why 8 people agree with you.
CommanderBullshit
CommanderBullshitLv2CommanderBullshit

Correction 29

KING_IN_YELLOW:correction 26
WeslenBR
WeslenBRLv3WeslenBR

Correction 31

CommanderBullshit:Correction 29
UndeadBeing
UndeadBeingLv2UndeadBeing

Correction 45

WeslenBR:Correction 31
_Bruh
_BruhLv4_Bruh

correction 49

FadeKnight:It’s a fanfiction. A good one so far. Things aren't supposed to go according to the original. He can add whoever he wants. It’s too early to say the character is bad. I really don’t know why 8 people agree with you.
Osypak
OsypakLv5Osypak

Correction 50

FadeKnight:It’s a fanfiction. A good one so far. Things aren't supposed to go according to the original. He can add whoever he wants. It’s too early to say the character is bad. I really don’t know why 8 people agree with you.
lightbringer_007
lightbringer_007Lv4lightbringer_007

correction 53

Osypak:Correction 50
Valentin_Reyes_9115
Valentin_Reyes_9115Lv1Valentin_Reyes_9115

look at this is a quality job, like few others, if you have complaints then do a better job, if you can, stop defame a job that in your life you will equal

Rabiya_Kk
Rabiya_KkLv1Rabiya_Kk

exactly bruh. when it comes to eve.he act like "oh she is a beautiful girl.but it's bad of me to look at her like that because she is gonna be my bros gf and wife." basically implied that he ain't gonna do anything that change future

palesteblue_
palesteblue_Lv3palesteblue_

Nobody wants a generic evil protagonist, that's been done a MILLION times on this site, also this was very cringeworthy to read

SrLao
SrLaoLv4SrLao

estas siendo exageradamente negativo con esta calificación. entiendo lo molesto que puede ser un MC de fanfic se enfoque únicamente en seguir la trama original pero no considero que sea completamente en este caso. Para empezar es mas "realista" y coherente tratar de conservar el mayor conocimiento "futuro" ( tendrías que ver los comics, hay peores cosas tener que enfrentarse a omniman, el imperio viltrumita, robot, la invasión de las versiones malvadas de Invencible de otras realidades, etc). Segundo, el MC no se lo toma como si el mundo gira alrededor de él mismo (es decir, no es un patán que se cree por en sima de otros o necesita/desea aparearse con cualquier chica que se cruza), ama y respeta a su familia, a de mas, porque crees que quería estar con Eva? Es mas, si termina dejando de lado el tema de ser un "superhéroe" y se centra en otras cosas como ayudar otras civilizaciones/mundos/universos o simplemente después del inevitable conflicto contra el imperio viltrumita podría decidir dejar el manto de héroe por unos siglos y usar su mejor recurso, su tiempo de vida tan longevo, entre otras cosas posibles. Cuestión, poner 1/5 de estrellas, porque el MC es un buen hermano, prefiere evitar los problemas que conlleva alterar la "trama", no busca tener un harem sin sentido, no considera su "realidad" como una "fantasía", entre otras cosas; por no decir que estas dejando de lado, la escritura, el desarrollo de fondo/mundo/personajes solo por que no te guste algo de la trama, prácticamente te cagas en el trabajo del autor Pondría mas cosas pero ya es mucho texto

Mizmoolla
MizmoollaLv3Mizmoolla

correction 57

Abuali1:correction 55
Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv5Lordmoonlight

correction its 61 rn

Mizmoolla:correction 57
Dragonised101
Dragonised101Lv4Dragonised101

62

FadeKnight:It’s a fanfiction. A good one so far. Things aren't supposed to go according to the original. He can add whoever he wants. It’s too early to say the character is bad. I really don’t know why 8 people agree with you.
O_w_l
O_w_lLv1O_w_l

And like a fool I didn't read the review and wasted my time 🤦🤦🤦🤦

Hunter_101:thanks if not for the review I'd waste time
O_w_l
O_w_lLv1O_w_l

already 64...

Hunter_101:thanks if not for the review I'd waste time