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AeonCDG
AeonCDGLv122yr
2021-12-05 16:57

I like that it’s yuri and all that, but reading kind of feels... unsatisfying? I don’t know how else to word it. It just feels like the writing equivalent of cardboard. I don’t exactly mean that to be rude, it’s a good story and all, I just, don’t really feel anything reading it.

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Bird_Of_Paradise
Bird_Of_ParadiseAuthor

I guess Izz fine XD. It can't meet everyone's taste haha😅I will try to improve more. And not just hide saying English ain't my first language XD....

AeonCDG
AeonCDGLv12

Well, that’s what writing is for. To get better at writing. Do your beat, I’ll be cheering you on from the sidelines

Bird_Of_Paradise:I guess Izz fine XD. It can't meet everyone's taste haha😅I will try to improve more. And not just hide saying English ain't my first language XD....
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Bird_Of_Paradise
Bird_Of_ParadiseAuthor

Haiii!! (>.<)

AeonCDG:Well, that’s what writing is for. To get better at writing. Do your beat, I’ll be cheering you on from the sidelines
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