This is a good web fiction, like you are aware the first 3 chapters are way too slow and become boring because everything is overdescribed to the point that you just want to skip it, another negative thing is that your paragraphs are too long, the premise is intriguing and scenes are all well done with good description. Word choice is good A lot of potential.
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