Review Detail of Entrail_JI in The Legacy of Thieves
Review detail
Had nothing to do so I read it, was only 13 chaps anyways so here is what I think. In short, it's good. ...but the first three chaps are a bit...how should I say, way over descriptive. The chapters are full of metaphors/colorfull descriptions of unnecessary things. Feels like the chapter is extended just to have more words. Almost everything has a lot of extra descriptive or metaphorical words attached to it. It's fine to do it sometimes, but if the first three chaps are like that, it can turn off some readers. Sometimes simple is better. Don't overcomplicate things too much. (my opinion) Another suggestion is that you should cut down the paragraphs. Your style is great for regular novels, but for webnovels I think its better to cut every two sentences as chucky paragraphs are things that are usually disliked by readers...trust me, I've learned the hard way. Other than that everything is great, I gave 5 stars because Im honestly just stating my opinion, doesn't change the fact that the writing quality and other stuff is great. Keep up the good work.
The Legacy of Thieves
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Yeah i saw thats why i read it till the end ...it does get better after 4 chaps. Howver i suggest u do something about them because the first 3 chaps is what hooks the readers Moreover since WN is mostly comrpomised of non native speakers your first 3 champs maybe very hard for them to read So before you fully invest in your novel i suggest u make the changes...as further along the lime youll find that editing the beginning harder and harder as there is less time. Still, great stuff. I liked the way ur novel is progrssing
Happy_Person_8656:Hey, thanks a lot for trying my novel and giving a helpful review. There is a reason for the long paragraphs and description and I have just mentioned it in the synopsis as this is an issue being pointed out by many readers. I'll try to edit them and make them better. Thanks again :)