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2021-07-20 22:18

I really like the concept of the story. ...yes it does start with your typical isekai scenario, but the transition is quite funny as the MC, being an otaku, adapts immediately to his new world. I have voted 5 stars for almost all the criteria because 1. The novel only has two chapters and so I can't really make a proper assessment 2. Story, character, world back has quite a lot of potential. This is my honest opinion. I can't give 5 stars at the writing quality though. Its probably what prevents me from giving this novel the full rounder of 5. The grammar is not very good. It would be a lie if I said it was good. Fortunately, the author does a good job at getting the message across, so although the English isn't that great I fully understood what the author meant. I will give writing quality 4 because so far there are only two chapters, and usually, authors improve as the author keeps writing. I've added the story to my collection and will be following along in hopes to see this story unleash its full potential because trust me. This story has a LOT of potential.

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For English, I would say the author should improve on present and past tenses, as well as punctuation. I know it's hard because I also struggle with this a lot, but if you manage to get the gist of this, I can guarantee that no one would ever comment anything with regards to your grammar. Btw...the grammar is not actually that bad, it's just that your tenses make it seem like it is. Should also add a synopsis to give the readers a better idea of what the story is about

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Thank you for wonderful comments. I appreciate your time being use here. I intentionally didNt write a synopsis. But I change my mind after reading your comment lol

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