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2021-07-24 14:07

▪︎Writing Quality...............☆☆☆☆○ ▪︎Story Development........☆○○○○ - this was supposed to be 4-5☆ but the sudden randomness and out of the blue events that lead me change my rate to this ff(sky dive 📉) - in my opinion i'm going to rate this ff (removing ch14-17.  17 is the current chapters so far) I will rate it 7/10, why 7?. Well because the story is pretty fast paced, no povs and almost all of her plans didn't work. She tried to brainwashed itachi since birth, trying to make him priorities family over the village. Well the plan failed but its OK I'm sure the author has some other plans. Itachi slowly distances him self to his family and clan, the mc didn't do anything she just let it go, she let danzo, hokage and the village brainwashe him and she let shisui die. Danzo was able to get shisui's sharingan and used it to itachi to make sure he kills his clan destroying the mc's hard work. (That was a pretty good twist if say so my self)  thumbs up to chapter 13(except for the last part of chapter that was so random). Here comes chapter 14-17. Ch14 By just reading the tittle I went what? TheF. did I click the wrong ff or what. Starts reading the chapter. After finishing the chapter my rate 7/10 went to 0/10. -The sudden change of character(personality) -The random event that leads her to having a one nightstand with kakashi -Kakashi who is currently the anbu captain(emo phase) who suddenly turned stupid. He didn't question that their's an uchiha surviver right in front of him. Didn't even realise that she was the twin sister of itachi(the one who murdered entire uchiha clan) / the girl who killed danzo who is currently a konoha S class criminal) and End up having sëx with a stranger. And when he realised or maby he knew from the start and just went with it. free loli sëx.(age13), after the deed she explains what danzo did to her clan and he just thinks a few sec. And whent me Emma go shower.(sigh) - MC getting pregnant at the age of 13 (uhuhuhu why u do this). - she endup getting summon by thor's mother(the one that reincarnated her to naruto world) - giving birth to an abnormal twins(age 13-14), it seems that the twins are not mentally, and spiritualy a baby. (Reincarnated I think) - and then goes back to naruto world. ▪︎Character Design...........☆☆○○○ - Physical design is good. - sudden change of personality not so good - seeing the tags again(I don't know if it's originally their from start. I don't remember seeing that tag when I started reading this ff) it says "SL#T". (.......) sigh. ▪︎Updating Stability..........☆☆☆☆○ ▪︎World Background.........☆☆☆☆○ -Not gonna drop this ff(yet). I'm curious what chapter 18 will be like. -after rereading the synopsis. Author did say that this ff will be questionable and he /she will drop this ff midway(maby). It only means that he/she is not serious on writing this ff. So if he/she was actually serious. this or maby his/her future ff or novel will have high chance of being GOLD(maby).

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JustRandomGuy
JustRandomGuyLv3

yea i agree with you

ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv13

I agree With Pretty much everything you said, and I agree that there Was a lot of potential but it was ruined by the author

Missing_Teeth
Missing_TeethLv3

probably the first time i see a constructive review on this site

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