Really good rewrite... Glad you decided to take writing more seriously even though there are a those who still hate on you. I sincerely hope you don't drop this and keep up the good work. Don't stress yourself out to much with making up lore since I know how hard that can be. Just have fun and make sure to stay consistent
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